Jared sits in his spot at the corner of the bar, and watches Jared with his chin on his fist.
shouldn't it read
Jared sits in his spot at the corner of the bar, and watches Jensen with his chin on his fist.
and apart from that I loved the story especially this line : Jared thrusts in hard enough to send him skidding a few inches over the floor, and he has to grab on tight. was so vivid I could see Jensen scrabbling.
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Jared sits in his spot at the corner of the bar, and watches Jared with his chin on his fist.
shouldn't it read
Jared sits in his spot at the corner of the bar, and watches Jensen with his chin on his fist.
and apart from that I loved the story especially this line : Jared thrusts in hard enough to send him skidding a few inches over the floor, and he has to grab on tight. was so vivid I could see Jensen scrabbling.
thanks for sharing ;)